Friday, February 09, 2007

Revision

Okay, another revision on the first chapter is done. I removed the first version (not really the first, but the first one I posted here), and replaced it with the revision. Kaycee and Brenda, your comments were helpful. I don't know if this new version is any better, but hopefully I've made changes that will increase the tension in the first half of the chapter. I hope it's an improvement. Once again, comments are appreciated!

2 Comments:

At 2:28 PM , Blogger Brenda Bradshaw said...

I think it's much more intense now! Good job! Glad I could be of help. I mean, minions need to be there for other minions, right? Heck yeah!

I wonder if that's the KC that used to post on my blog... (goes to investigate)

 
At 5:33 PM , Blogger Wonderwood said...

Thanks Brenda :-) You're right, I don't want people scanning, and I'm glad you think this version is more intense. I didn't make any huge changes, but I hope the changes I did make are improving the story. It's a process, as you know, and your comments are most helpful. Thanks :-)

 

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